Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic Poetry Contest Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]Kitty Kiska[/m] at 5:49 am on July 6, 2009[quote]Quote: from [m]pujolsfan[/m] at 10:25 pm on July 5, 2009[quote]Quote: from [m]Kitty Kiska[/m] at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009[quote]You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl.[/quote] whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do[/quote] Well then you could have suggested more things to include...like she likes apples and the colour red and hates dogs, is scared of butterfly's...somehting for the artistic people to work with you know what i mean?[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post pujolsfan Posted at 12:16 pm on June 30, 2009 What is it: This is a poetry contest. If you so choose, you will write a birthday poem for a girl who is turning 18. Her name is Shay Mecke. (first e is short, last e is long) Background: I am in need of a poem to give to a girl on her 18th birthday. Her birthday is July 30th. Remember, we are just friends...so please, nothing that will creep her out. Nora helped me out immensely and she came up with the following. You may either modify it to your liking, or create a completely new poem. It's up to you. I like the first verse and part of the second verse. There are also a few lines that she came up with in addition to the original poem, so you can use that in it if you would like.   I'm writing this poem for a girl named Shay, For every year there is a day, In which another year is turned, And thus another digit earned. And on the thirtieth of July, (Hallelujah! By and by,) Shay is turning eighteen years, And so we all can shout our cheers! With years come age, with age we move And I hope that I will prove, That when you go to the C of O, I'll miss walking the ways you go, You're really awesome at guitar, ------------I'm not liking this part... And going each week to The Rivr. Happy Birthday, Shay Mecke, Have a great day, and Au Rivoir! Not only is eighteen divisible by two, It is now the number that represents you! Child to adult in just one day, It's really pretty awesome, Shay! Guidelines: The only thing that I ask is for you not to use any profanity, suggestive things, and try not to make it romantic. Other than that you are free to do whatever you want. I will say that I like poems that rhyme because I think they are fun, but you don't have to do it that way if you don't want. I don't want to limit you. Prizes: I currently have 4000 points that I'm willing to depart with and have a few other people willing to make contributions. Deadline:   July 28th   If you have any poetic talent at all, please give it a shot!!! I will get this put up on the contest page as soon as possible and hopefully get a sticky.

Replies pujolsfan Posted at 2:15 pm on Aug. 3, 2009 Quote: from R Blake at 8:14 am on July 3, 2009 Hi pujolsfan! Cool to hear about your friend's b-day. I wrote this for her, and though it may be on the short side I really hope you like it: Shay Mecke, 18-to-be Seven months since New Year's eve The fireworks are like your life Spiraling up into flight They say that youth is tied to fun Well I say youth is in the sun As long as birthdays light the sky You'll have joy in all your life I've always treasured all my friends Those whom talk and smiles lend And you I treasure eighteen times Today, for with you friendship rhymes In years to come we'll grow together Days of fair and cloudy weather Now let us think of futures bright And toast your 18 years tonight! YOU WIN!!! R Blake Posted at 1:20 am on July 9, 2009 OK, here's my alternate version. If you'd like me to mix the two, or change either of them just let me know!   How exciting can it be When all can hear, and say and see That Shay Mecke has turned 18 I think it's one amazing thing As friend I count you, rain or shine And more skies you've yet to find Wherever you can see a path I'm sure you'll live it with a laugh I send you health and happiness And much good luck, and joy no less When all is said and all is done Remember all the birthday fun 18 years have led you here Decades more of life and cheer Are waiting just around the bend Congratulations, my good friend! Kitty Kiska Posted at 11:58 am on July 7, 2009 Quote: from pujolsfan at 1:10 pm on July 7, 2009 Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 7:49 am on July 6, 2009 Quote: from pujolsfan at 10:25 pm on July 5, 2009 Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009 You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl.   whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do    Well then you could have suggested more things to include...like she likes apples and the colour red and hates dogs, is scared of butterfly's...somehting for the artistic people to work with you know what i mean? yeah, i kinda wanted it to be generic. be artsy with words and not necessarily things about her. the less personal it is the less creepy she will think i am Well i guess so. pujolsfan Posted at 5:10 am on July 7, 2009 Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 7:49 am on July 6, 2009 Quote: from pujolsfan at 10:25 pm on July 5, 2009 Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009 You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl.    whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do Well then you could have suggested more things to include...like she likes apples and the colour red and hates dogs, is scared of butterfly's...somehting for the artistic people to work with you know what i mean? yeah, i kinda wanted it to be generic. be artsy with words and not necessarily things about her. the less personal it is the less creepy she will think i am Kitty Kiska Posted at 5:49 am on July 6, 2009 Quote: from pujolsfan at 10:25 pm on July 5, 2009 Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009 You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl. whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do Well then you could have suggested more things to include...like she likes apples and the colour red and hates dogs, is scared of butterfly's...somehting for the artistic people to work with you know what i mean? pujolsfan Posted at 2:25 pm on July 5, 2009 Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009 You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl. whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do Kitty Kiska Posted at 6:22 am on July 4, 2009 You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl. Kitty Kiska Posted at 6:19 am on July 4, 2009 On your 18th birthday you are given a key To a whole new world to explore and see With many decisions for you to make That effect the future path you take But i am sure, that in your heart You know exactly where to start So for the moment just have some fun And celebrate with everyone For your 18th birthday you must enjoy Your an adult now so don,t be coy pujolsfan Posted at 12:33 pm on July 3, 2009 Quote: from R Blake at 8:14 am on July 3, 2009 Hi pujolsfan! Cool to hear about your friend's b-day. I wrote this for her, and though it may be on the short side I really hope you like it: Shay Mecke, 18-to-be Seven months since New Year's eve The fireworks are like your life Spiraling up into flight They say that youth is tied to fun Well I say youth is in the sun As long as birthdays light the sky You'll have joy in all your life I've always treasured all my friends Those whom talk and smiles lend And you I treasure eighteen times Today, for with you friendship rhymes In years to come we'll grow together Days of fair and cloudy weather Now let us think of futures bright And toast your 18 years tonight! i'll be honest... i like that pretty well. not sure about the beginning with the fireworks. but other than that, i think it was really good :) R Blake Posted at 6:14 am on July 3, 2009 Hi pujolsfan! Cool to hear about your friend's b-day. I wrote this for her, and though it may be on the short side I really hope you like it: Shay Mecke, 18-to-be Seven months since New Year's eve The fireworks are like your life Spiraling up into flight They say that youth is tied to fun Well I say youth is in the sun As long as birthdays light the sky You'll have joy in all your life I've always treasured all my friends Those whom talk and smiles lend And you I treasure eighteen times Today, for with you friendship rhymes In years to come we'll grow together Days of fair and cloudy weather Now let us think of futures bright And toast your 18 years tonight! pujolsfan Posted at 4:39 pm on July 1, 2009 Quote: from S0LITUDE at 5:28 pm on June 30, 2009 I'm not sure I would want someone to write a poem for me so that I could give it to someone else. :/ That just seems awkward to me. I think the fact that you do it yourself is what really makes it special. i agree. but there is a problem with that...i cant write poetry. iBritt Posted at 5:47 pm on June 30, 2009 Quote: from S0LITUDE at 6:28 pm on June 30, 2009 I'm not sure I would want someone to write a poem for me so that I could give it to someone else. :/ That just seems awkward to me. I think the fact that you do it yourself is what really makes it special. /thread S0LITUDE Posted at 3:28 pm on June 30, 2009 I'm not sure I would want someone to write a poem for me so that I could give it to someone else. :/ That just seems awkward to me. I think the fact that you do it yourself is what really makes it special. iBritt Posted at 2:33 pm on June 30, 2009 You're an adult now But you're still my little girl Remember the time we Spoke out against world? It was you and me for a moment It will be us for a lifetime Today's your reckoning Don't let it go to waste. SpRiNgS Posted at 1:47 pm on June 30, 2009 Hey Shay I know turning eighteen can be cool and frightening but no need to fret cause like max goof said "this is the first day of the rest of your life" and he does have a point from this moment on you're not just a girl in this land you're blossoming into a wo-MAN Most recent 15 of 19 previous replies displayed.