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Carry on (rap freestyle I wrote)  |
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Replies: 10 Last Post Sep. 24 7:38pm by Trendz
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( Anonymous )
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Yea so lemme know what you think of this (sorry if the grammar isn't perfect). And please keep all criticism constructive, its all good if you didn't like it but at least state why you didn't like it lol thanks, here it is: My status? I've had it with this fate, I'm gonna pray Don't wanna wake up, can't face another day This state is so mundane...and plus you know I can't Take this fuckin pain or, wait for luck to change Make others insane when I talk in circles Those you want to turn to, so often hurt you Its much more then I deserve to go through Like every word about me that you heard is so true Absurd wit no clue, cuz that's just the type of Zone you prone to when the world disowns you But fuck it, don't need em, know your better without Or at least that's what I keep tellin myself As the stress keeps buildin, searchin for a way Just to dead these feelings, catch a vision of me What you fittin to see is such a fictional scene, as I'm Goin thru the motions wit a grin and a gleam But dig in it deep, you know I live in deceit Just a master magician, wit a trick up his sleeve If only you could see what was hidden beneath Think its all good??? I laugh and stay gritten my teeth Man, I'm itchin to scream, its all inside the dome Truth is, I lose it and cry when I'm alone Feel firm, gears turn, my focus is tight Til you been in these shoes, you don't know what its like So hopeless to fight, wit affairs anemic Cuz they'll never turn around like a paraplegic Is there a reason? when in sight, it's so bleak But this mic that I reach for some type of relief So I write to a beat, and sing the saddest songs And somehow, I find a way to carry on
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11:10 am on Sep. 24, 2009
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 LiveWire Humor
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Downwitopp
Dairy Product Addict
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nice "rap" you stupid faggot
------- dead astronaut in space
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ViLE
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Not bad. Pretty ill. <ThumbsUp>
------- Also... Go Die.
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11:11 am on Sep. 24, 2009 | Joined: Aug. 2007 | Days Active: 195 Join to learn more about ViLE England, United Kingdom | Gay Male | Posts: 14,430 | Points: 13,637
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Im the Dude
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Quote: from Joziah at 11:10 am on Sep. 24, 2009
Carry on. Nothing to see here.
oh ok *walks away*
------- LiveWire's Executive Chef I'm Manny Pacquiao's bitch.
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Trendz
Scenester
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Tech Support Leader
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Quote: from VilE at 2:11 pm on Sep. 24, 2009
Not bad. Pretty ill. <ThumbsUp>
Agreed.
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( Anonymous )
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Thanx for the responses y'all but I was really lookin for a bit more, like anything specific you liked or disliked about it???
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11:20 am on Sep. 24, 2009
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tick
Connoisseur
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I like rap and I can tell you that this is pretty shitty It's not a good flow at all.
------- QQ more tick
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11:21 am on Sep. 24, 2009 | Joined: Sep. 2008 | Days Active: 238 Join to learn more about tick England, United Kingdom | Bisexual Female | Posts: 5,312 | Points: 7,956
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Solomon Grundy
This was a triumph
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Granted with freestyle it's even more important to know the how you're pronouncing stuff and what beat you're going to but this one just doesn't seem to flow as tick said.
------- Solomon is a Solo-man Teh hawtz S ϟ G TOYx is my one and only.
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( Anonymous )
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Well it flows better when you actually hear it to the beat I wrote it to, if you wanna hear the track when I actually record it, I can show you.....?
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11:40 am on Sep. 24, 2009
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