~Your Effect~
Your Effect
You broke her
You and you alone
don't blame it on anyone else
you killed her
with your lies and addictions
all the times she warned you
Why did you think she had those scars?
They weren't for decoration
they're the effect of what you did to her
you tore her apart
you're why she can't smile
the reason she won't laugh
the cause of her death
I don't say this to cause pain
rather to warn you before you do it again
you're like a snake
one bite and it's venon will kill
those nights when you were gone
she cried herself to sleep
wishing she could be better
so then you wouldn't go away
but the wishing did nothing
you still left her alone
she acts like she didn't care
but inside deep she really did
she never told you how she felt
because you would never listen
she understands it was your money
your time, work, and effor that got her here
but what about her feelings
they didn't matter, never mattered
so now she's dead and left you this note

~Cliff...~
She's heading to a cliff
getting ready to jump
thoughts race through her mind
'Is this right or is it wrong?'
She doesn't care anymore
her home which was just a house
tore her apart and broke her
she has nothing to live for
and she's getting weak from fighting
she can't bear to stand anymore
so she runs to the cliff
to see if she can fly
and ends up ending her life


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Emo and attention seeking.Pathetic.

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Oh right. I'm sorry that I had to write how I was feeling in a couple of poems. That just happened to sound "emo and attention seeking and pathetic".

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Quote: from Siucra at 9:53 am on Nov. 3, 2009

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Emo and attention seeking.Pathetic.

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Oh right. I'm sorry that I had to write how I was feeling in a couple of poems. That just happened to sound "emo and attention seeking and pathetic".

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You're just another immature teen who thinks the world revolves around you and what you "go through",bit of advice,grow the fuck up and get yourself.Stop expecting people to sympathise with your self pity.Are you not embarrassed how you portray yourself ?

Just another weak girl who craves problems and sorrow so you can self mutilate and blame your own actions on this person you write about.Cutting does not give you depth as you make think,it merely pulls you into an emotional vicous circle of no control.

Your just another emo child who writes poems about suicide and dramatic events that never happened,not original at all.

As for your poetic,technique ?Don't even get me started,a good poet suggests and draws the reader in to exploring the words,you haven't got a notion on how to write.

Go look up Adrienne Rich,I'm sure you'll relate to her self pity,maybe listen to Evanescence also if you can't understand her.

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Tir gan teanga,Tir gan aimn !Too beige.

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Quote: from amber1991 at 5:54 pm on Nov. 3, 2009

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Quote: from Siucra at 9:53 am on Nov. 3, 2009

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Emo and attention seeking.Pathetic.

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 Oh right. I'm sorry that I had to write how I was feeling in a couple of poems. That just happened to sound "emo and attention seeking and pathetic".

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You're just another immature teen who thinks the world revolves around you and what you "go through",bit of advice,grow the fuck up and get yourself.Stop expecting people to sympathise with your self pity.Are you not embarrassed how you portray yourself ?

Just another weak girl who craves problems and sorrow so you can self mutilate and blame your own actions on this person you write about.Cutting does not give you depth as you make think,it merely pulls you into an emotional vicous circle of no control.
 
Your just another emo child who writes poems about suicide and dramatic events that never happened,not original at all.

As for your poetic,technique ?Don't even get me started,a good poet suggests and draws the reader in to exploring the words,you haven't got a notion on how to write.

Go look up Adrienne Rich,I'm sure you'll relate to her self pity,maybe listen to Evanescence also if you can't understand her.

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You're so wrong. I don't think the world revolves around me. I don't expect people to have sympathy and pity for me. Oh yeah, I want these problems in my life so I feel like it's my fault, just so I can cut. What poetic technique? Obviously I'm not trying to go professional.

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http://allpoetry.com/DarkestStorm

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Quote: from Siucra at 4:43 pm on Nov. 4, 2009

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Quote: from amber1991 at 5:54 pm on Nov. 3, 2009

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Quote: from Siucra at 9:53 am on Nov. 3, 2009

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Emo and attention seeking.Pathetic.

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  Oh right. I'm sorry that I had to write how I was feeling in a couple of poems. That just happened to sound "emo and attention seeking and pathetic".

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 You're just another immature teen who thinks the world revolves around you and what you "go through",bit of advice,grow the fuck up and get yourself.Stop expecting people to sympathise with your self pity.Are you not embarrassed how you portray yourself ?  

 Just another weak girl who craves problems and sorrow so you can self mutilate and blame your own actions on this person you write about.Cutting does not give you depth as you make think,it merely pulls you into an emotional vicous circle of no control.  
   
 Your just another emo child who writes poems about suicide and dramatic events that never happened,not original at all.  

 As for your poetic,technique ?Don't even get me started,a good poet suggests and draws the reader in to exploring the words,you haven't got a notion on how to write.  

 Go look up Adrienne Rich,I'm sure you'll relate to her self pity,maybe listen to Evanescence also if you can't understand her.

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You're so wrong. I don't think the world revolves around me. I don't expect people to have sympathy and pity for me. Oh yeah, I want these problems in my life so I feel like it's my fault, just so I can cut. What poetic technique? Obviously I'm not trying to go professional.

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How old are you exactly ?What has happened in your life that has made you cut?What can justify it to you?

I know what I am talking about btw just incase you assume that I don't know anything about self mutilation or "depression" or that I couldn't possibly understand how emotional teenage girls act.

To me,you're just another girl who spends too much time in their room listening to bands like MCR and you hurt yourself just to validate your insecurities and try to create physical evidence to prove that what you're "going through".

I GUARANTEE,that in a few years time after you've matured and learned to control your hormonal angst you're going to be so ashamed of emo-ising yourself for the sake of drama.


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Tir gan teanga,Tir gan aimn !Too beige.